I burned a week of connects on openers that started with “Hi, I’m a…”
Clients don’t care. They’re skimming 30 of those. Yours looks like everyone else’s.
What actually gets a click for me:
Open on their mess. One sentence. Name the thing that’s broken in the post.
Then one proof that fits that job, not your whole career.
Then a small next step. Not “looking forward to hearing from you.”
Last one that actually got a reply for me was a Shopify cleanup post. First line wasn’t “I’m a developer.” It was “Your export is going to duplicate SKUs on variant rows if you migrate as-is. I’d clean those first, then map collections.”
Same shape every time. Their landmine, then my first move.
Write that skeleton once. Swap the details. Stop rewriting your bio every time.
I made a small kit of those if you want the pile: https://freelance-proposal-win-kit.agreeable-century.workers.dev/
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